There is a fifth dimension beyond that which is known to man. It is a dimension as vast as space and as timeless as infinity. It is the middle-ground between light and shadow, between science and superstition, and it lies between the pit of man's fears and the summit of his knowledge. This is the dimension of imagination. It is an area we call the 'Twilight Zone'
"Thanks for letting me go", Bucmaster told his mom.
Buc was going to go find Tracy in Ohio. It was an idea that came to him while roaming around on FanNation. He was going to go find a bunch of his friends. First, he was going to find Tracy, and then he would find his spooky little friend, Ghosthunter.
Buc was going by himself. His mom drove him to the airport, and then he got on the plane. He was put into first class. "Well, that is weird", he thought to himself. "I didn't know my mom bought me a first-class ticket. He went throughout most of the flight without worry.
But then he noticed something. They were going right over Ohio. And they weren't slowing down. He tapped on a flight attendant's shoulder. "Excuse me, but-- oh my god!" The flight attendant wasn't a flight attendant. She was a zombie.
Buc grabbed a parachute, and jumped out the side of the plane. As he fell, and after he pulled it out, he thought, "Damn, that was close. I need to watch myself. I wonder what the hell is going on...". After he landed, he hailed a cab. "Excuse me, would you drop me off at a restaurant"? He paid the cab driver the fee, and went inside the restaurant.
He sat down, and asked for a towel to wipe the rain out of his hair. After that, he ordered a cold water with lemon in it, and some nice shrimp pasta. After he had some great key lime pie, he put on his sweater over him, and started walking to Tracy's house. According to the directions he had, it was only a couple blocks away from the restaurant.
He started to get a really bad headache. He was almost there. He was wondering if Tracy would let him take a nap on her couch. He knew it was rude, but he was insanely tired. He finally showed up.
Buc knocked on Tracy's door. "Tracy? Tracy?" Nobody would answer. He was starting to get scared. What if she got kidnapped? He left to go find her. He looked everywhere, but he just couldn't. He found a hotel, and fell asleep. He woke up for a suprise. When he woke up, he found Tracy sitting on the edge of his bed.
But something wasn't right. She looked like she had not slept for days, and her eyes were bloodshot. Buc asked, "Tracy? Are you okay"? She tried to open her mouth to say something, but she couldn't. Buc tried to figure out what she was trying to say. It looked like she was trying to yell "HELP"! Buc grabbed her limp arm and tried to drag her out of the room. But she was glued to that spot.
He finally got her out of the room. They went back to her house. After she layed in bed for a couple of days, with Buc taking care of her, she was good to go. Buc spent about another week with Tracy, where they went to a Patriots game. They said good-bye, and then then Buc left on his search for Ghosthunter.
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Your writing is pretty good considering how young you are, and there for a minute I thought I was a zombie sitting on the edge of your bed!
Tracy00214-Is back!
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Uh Buc..whats that in your tags?
Tracy00214-Is back!
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Nothing...nothing at all.
Bucmaster: Rocktober
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Sounds like the start to an epic story!! Good job Buc!
Ghost.
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Haha Buc! I really like this story, A LOT of potential in this! The storyline was enticing and made me wanna read more, keep it coming, but leave out all the quirky details, for example:
"After that, he ordered a cold water with lemon in it, and some nice shrimp pasta. After he had some great key lime pie, he put on his sweater over him"
should be
"He decided to order some cool water to refresh himself and some tasty shrimp pasta. After desert he quickly put on his sweater"
The details that you have are unnecessary, try and clean it up a bit, but it was good!
dudeman is gone.
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Thesauras.com could help Buc, take your time when writing these.
dudeman is gone.
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Don't go looking for Tracy, Buc. She's holding behind her back, the remnants of the last FN person who tracked her down.
i B4 e:FN blows…
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Two questions..how did Tracy know what hotel you were in ?
And did the Pats win ?
Harry Callahan
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IB is right Buc, and yes of course the Pats won, Harry!
Tracy00214-Is back!
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So Buc, you went to Ohio to see Tracy, but you went to Boston to see a Pats game, or did they come to play the Bengals?
Anyway, good blog. I hope the next one is as good.
Dyhard:Homecoming…
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Good first draft, Buc... you could have a gem of a story here. I'd elaborate more on the flight, the airport experience... in general, flesh in your stories with as much detail as possible. What color upholstery were the seats on the plane? Were they leather? Was this your first time in first class? Did you get any perks you didn't expect? How was the flight? Was the ride turbulent or calm?
How could you tell it was Ohio below? What tipped you off? I'd love to hear more description about the zombie as well...
What kind of restaurant? Was this a simple family bistro or was it a fine-dining Italian joint? How was the shrimp pasta seasoned? What kind of noodles -- penne, fettuccine, farfalle? Perhaps orecchiete? Mostaccioli?
I mean not to make your head spin, and I know that you haven't been feeling well lately. Thanks for putting this out there, and I laud your effort in the face of fatigue and infirmity. But since you've always asked me to help you out as a writer, there you go... that would be a start. Elaborate... for instance, what was Tracy wearing? Were her clothes rumpled as though she had been wearing them those same few sleepless days that her eyes betrayed? It's the little things like that which help expand a story beyond a short tale into the makings of an epic...
Keep up with this thought process... you could have something here. I can't wait to see the next adventure, and I'd especially love to see a second draft of this chapter...
Bigalke
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What'd the cab driver look like? Was the cab in good repair or was it run-down? How far did you have to drive? How much did it cost? How were you funding this excursion? Etc. etc.... I'll shut up now with the constructive criticisms until I see another draft or chapter... because there definitely should be more of this!
Bigalke
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Thanks Bigalke. I really appreciate your help.
= - )
Bucmaster: Rocktober
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LOL
djroxalot
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Um, zombiesss............
BRAINS!!!!
djroxalot
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The details that you have are unnecessary, try and clean it up a bit, but it was good!
dudeman: nets got lopez! JL | 07/01/08, 02:45 PM
Sorry dudeman, I totally disagree.......I agree with Alke, try to be as descriptive as possible......People that read like the little details and it makes it that much more enjoyable
djroxalot
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Where's Cheez? haha, good blog.
Cheezhead: Is Back…
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Nice blog Buc,quite interesting,while you're here,why didn't you visit me?
(Cincy)
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YES!!!!!!
HAHAHAHAHA!!!!
Terpsfan is Maxwell…
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